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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Death 999 » Fri Nov 16, 2012 3:25 pm

Fixed. Also changed a few words here and there for clarity.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Dabir » Mon Nov 19, 2012 2:18 pm

"Moments later, Zev silently submitted a flight plan for the 1038 to dock with her vessel for transferring Cass, her equipment, and the six mycon. The whole operation was to take only thirteen minutes. [iWe had better be efficient about this![/i]"

Read it through anyway. I like where this is going.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Niffiwan » Tue Nov 20, 2012 10:23 am

Just read through it, thanks! Progressing nicely as ever. :)

I am a bit confused by Cass's attitude, but I guess this is something that will become more clear.

A few notes:
"with various character happily" should be "with various characters happily"

"Zenick" should "Zelnick".

Zev could perhaps be added to the Peeru character reference.
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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Death 999 » Mon Dec 03, 2012 4:09 pm

Nothing ready for Dec 1. I think Dec 15 is a go, though. I've had a crazy few weeks.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Niffiwan » Tue Dec 18, 2012 5:39 am

Hello! How is it going?
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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Death 999 » Tue Dec 18, 2012 11:51 am

Almost dead. The winter came and with it, my energy. I sleep on the train instead of writing.

And moreover, I know where I want to get to, but I'm not sure what my next step should be.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Niffiwan » Sat Jan 05, 2013 6:47 pm

You know, just playing through the recently-released UQM-HD now... I realize that part of what makes this story so interesting is seeing the interactions of races who you don't actually see interact in the game. Pkunk + Druuge is one such combination. I must say that I'm really looking forward to seeing what the Pkunk and the Utwig have to say about each other, though... they have such similarities (ways of knowing the "truth" that others disbelieve and find silly, but nevertheless seem to work) as well as such fundamental differences in temperament and philosophy.

I don't know if that will come up at some point in the story, but it will be neat if it does. :)
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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Zeracles » Sun Mar 10, 2013 4:55 am

"I'm surprised you're being so... nice to them."

Cass shook her head. "Is erasing their identity and infantilizing them really nice?
I wonder whether dropping any Mycon into the furnace could lead to tension that dents the onboard spirit.
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I think this is right, the writing is fine but I suspect Peeru would be very hard to adapt for a broader audience.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Death 999 » Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:53 pm

Zeracles wrote:I wonder whether dropping any Mycon into the furnace could lead to tension that dents the onboard spirit.
Naturally, but she has that all planned out. Her 'story' can accommodate casualties.


Oh oops. I just realized that I left out the Arcturus portal. Quick adjustment there.

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Re: Peeru Fanfic Comments

Post by Zeracles » Sun May 19, 2013 12:23 pm

Nice, well-constructed bit of melee as usual. One might have expected the Arilou to step up . . . or maybe not. In any case this should be good for Peeru's standing!

Some of the italicised bits aren't closed properly.
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